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 Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 11:29 am
All the attempts to escape my fate—had been crushed.
I started to regret ever agreeing to this. Adrenaline pulsed throughout my veins.
There was a deep urge I had for this power. Of course I would hate myself for having it.
But still, was I really going to give up everything I had fought for?
I wouldn’t be facing possible death right now if it wasen't for her.
As terrified as I was, I couldn’t bring myself to admit it.
She came closer to me, smiling in a friendly way. Well, more like in a sadistic way.
We stared at each other for the longest time.
I opened up my mouth to make some sort of sarcastic remark.
I decided since my life was on the line, that wasen't a very good idea.
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So this is the Preface to a story I'm working on.
Yes. This may have you a bit confused.
It's a Preface. As in: it shows a preview of the middle of the story.
My story is about a young boy who's parents are murdered when he is ten years old.
Eight years later he goes out to seek who killed his parents and is out for revenge.
This story takes place in London, England and it's fiction.
I forgot to mention his parents were killed by a vampire.
So yup, vampires, werewolfs, demons, oh my!
Sorry if there's any grammar errors. I'm only thirteen and I type fast sometimes.
Haha, I love my youth! But I wish I was older sometimes....
Anyway, please tell me what you think!
I'd like some critic but please don't be too hard.
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Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 9:32 pm
Its' acceptable, just need to get rid of the bit about making the sarcastic remark. ninja
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Posted: Tue Jun 23, 2009 5:30 am
Oddly familiar to my writing...
But, I don't write about that anyway.
Nonetheless, I enjoy it. The bit about that Sarcastic remark? I made me giggle.
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